Great typo work - like the black and red - very nice.

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Nice, very nice.

gorgeous work!
i hope the presentation goes well

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This is awesome hun. You did really well with this.

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Nicely done. works brilliantly.

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Excellent work!

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good job man!

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What purpose is the the extention of the acsender on 'd'? I feel it just creates a nasty sectioned off triangle at the top of the piece, and serves no real compositional need as the eye is already drawn to the body of type by bold "consider".

On 'consider': The kerning seems to be off a little, very tight in some pleaces, and even tighter in others. Tight kerning can work, but think about the space in and around the letterforms, 'con-' is very loose compared with the tight '-sid-' (despite c and o being way too close to each other, even more than touching) and again the extention of the ascender leaves '-er' alienated.

I can understand that this is a 'poetic' piece of typography, and it is there to be seen rather than read, but I think the extreme angles and overlaying type in the body is very offputting.

Why is 'no' in a different typeface?

Just my two cents.

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very depressing

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Without the streched ascender on "d" the composition looked way too empty. In fact i had copies of the same composition laid next to each other, with different editing on the word Consider (different fonts, kerning, sizes, styles and even different manipulation of the word). Visually, i thought this gave the most interesting look. Yours was the only in depth comment on this so far, since until now i relied on only my decision, however our presentation is in a couple of hours and i was hoping to show them all the different versions i made for this.

I think the sharp angles in the chosen font emphasizes on the cruelty of the situation (as this poem was taken from an autobiography of a man who spent a year in a concentration camp) and so does the overlapping text which creates a sort of mess.

And i was actually thinking about the word no, and i cant' remember at all why i used a different font for it. =\

I put a hell of a lot of experimentation in this piece, and i do appreciate your questions/comments.

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